You have heard of murderers
and thieves and traitors
locked up in high towers
for their crimes
But I dare you to see
a free man suffer
in a prison of his own making
Where there are no visible walls
to lock him in
and keep us out
You have heard of murderers
and thieves and traitors
locked up in high towers
for their crimes
But I dare you to see
a free man suffer
in a prison of his own making
Where there are no visible walls
to lock him in
and keep us out
hmm, me, for example…
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Aw. Don’t let it go on forever, Tejaswi. Tear down the walls and be free. ๐
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Thanks
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if true would there be suicide – self-inflicted capitol punishment? there so many different kinds of men/women
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There might be. Or maybe it has happened already. I think the scariest demons that one has to face are those within themselves. But we deal with it in different ways. Some inflict harm to themselves. Some turn to other people. I don’t know which is worse.
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it all worse – as poets we are witness to all that humans feel – how can it be otherwise? and we suffer, oh dear sweet God how we suffer. . . but, as i know you have already figured out, we are cursed with the knack for twisting beauty out of darkness – you are a young dragon as yet and this will be second nature to you soon – continue in your learning young one
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“We are cursed with the knack of twisting beauty out of darkness.” This perfectly sums it up. We find poetry in suffering. Thank you, Chyfrin. I have a lot to learn. ๐
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i stand quietly and watch as you progress – you have vast potenital
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Nice lightness of touch applied to a dark and complex subject. ๐
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Thank you, Nick. ๐
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Reblogged this on tinkerer of words and commented:
HANDPICKED#4.
Precise and perfect!
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Thank you for reblogging, Toto. It’s greatly appreciated. โค
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no probs ๐
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So elegant…and true. This one I like very much! May I have it?! *grin*
Ron
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Thank you, Ron. Of course you may have it. ๐
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This free man reminds me of me
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Aw. I think all of us are prisoners, in different ways. Thanks for dropping by, Mel. ๐
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You’re welcome ๐
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yes, can’t agree more.. we all are prisoners disguised in the free man’s clothes
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But we also have it within ourselves to be free. Thanks for dropping by. ๐
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the pleasure is all mine ๐
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Your poem has reminded me of this one by Hafiz, the great sufi master:
https://oldtimerchronicle2.wordpress.com/2013/12/07/dropping-keys/
There is wisdom shared in these poems, perhaps an answer in one to a question in the other, but it seems to be taking me too long to glean fully…
Amen.
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One of the poets I want to read. The poem you referred to is beautiful. I wish I could write that good. Thank you for dropping by. ๐
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Your wish has come true. You now write just as good & sometimes even better than great sufi master Hafiz. Congratulations @ have a happy new year!
Yours truly
Rawclyde!
your genie
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Wow. I absolutely love this comment. I will continue writing and get even better at it. Thank you, Rawclyde. May you have a great 2016. ๐
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Hello there. An excellent read, really enjoyed it ๐
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Thank you, Gretal. ๐
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Oh my god! That prisoner is me ๐ฆ you found out?!
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That seems to be the case. ๐ But seriously, I’m glad that a lot of you can relate to this. Must be inherent to writers and poets. โค
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Yes of course!
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“Where there are no visible walls
to lock him in
and keep us out”
Powerful ending. I like the identification with “us.”
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Thank you. โค
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you’re welcome!
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Deeply rich. Captures so well that to be free does not mean one is truly free.
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Thank you. To paraphrase what one of my favorite philosophers said, none are more helplessly enslaved than those who falsely believe they are free. ๐
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We humans create prisons for ourselves. And because we have created those walls around us, we are the only ones who can set ourselves free. But setting ourselves free is extremely difficult. Amazing poem!!
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You are absolutely right. It takes a lot of courage to free ourselves. Thank you, Ramexa. ๐
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Anytime! Please do check out my blog as well! ๐
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Sure, sure. I will. ๐
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Thanks! ๐
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“But I dare you to see
a free man suffer”
I see them everyday. And the knowledge of it torments and imprisons me also, as well as my own personal demons. But what I’ve learnt is, freedom is just a picture you see outside the bars of your prison (it’s always greener on the other side) and when you open the gates you step into another prison. I don’t believe in external freedom anymore, I think freedom is ironically confined to within. To find freedom, you must first learn to feel free despite the bars. Easier said than done.
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“Freedom is just a picture you see outside the bars of your prison.” I can’t say it better. Indeed, real freedom lies inside each of us. Thank you for sharing your insights! ๐
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